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Old 14 August 2010, 15:57   #1
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KATA PENGANTAR:


STORY :



COPYRIGHT:


TAMBAHAN :


Tiap Chapter akan di-Update beberapa hari sekali
soalnya saya lagi sibuk ama sekolah
kalo ga mood saya yang lagi jelek
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Old 14 August 2010, 16:11   #2
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ini keren banget!!!!!
walopun perkembangan critanya yg super cepat kyk tipikal manga shounen
fanfic ini
ga sabar buat lanjutannya n penasaran ama cowo berjas yg bikin mio kayak anak bayi dihadapan dia

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Old 14 August 2010, 16:14   #3
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wah keren tuh

btw, bikin aku ngakak

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nice story, lanjutin yah...!!
kebetulan saya juga suka cerita balap-balap kayak gini
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Old 14 August 2010, 16:15   #4
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ini keren banget!!!!!
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saking terpananya mungkin ampe lupa nanya nama
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Old 14 August 2010, 16:31   #5
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settingan ceritanya agak mirip vn moero downhill 2.
itu coman pendapat gua aja.
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settingan ceritanya agak mirip vn moero downhill 2.
itu coman pendapat gua aja.
serius
saya blon maenin moero hill
tapi klo ternyata mirip brarti moi blon bs lepas dari penyakit fanfic dia sebelumnya
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serius
saya blon maenin moero hill
tapi klo ternyata mirip brarti moi blon bs lepas dari penyakit fanfic dia sebelumnya
emangnay dia puya penyakit apaan?
soalnya gua jujur belom lama berkecimpung didunia vn kebetulan aja moero 2 baru gua maenin sebelom puasa jadinya masih fresh.
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g bisa lepas dari settingan cerita yg jadi referensinya
di karya sebelumnya fanfic mio ttg yukine dari clannad
n settingannya bener2 mirip
ga kayak om moetinez yg bisa bikin setting baru utk cerita dia dan kyou
oh well
mio u should fix this problem
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meski ini beberapa ada yang mirip dengan moero downhill, saya ada gebrakan terbaru yang (kayanya) belom pernah ada di manga shonen manapun
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chapter updated:
chapter 3, 4, 5

@mfa : boong kalo aku bilang ga kepengaruh ama moero downhill 2,
tapi lihatlah chapter" selanjutnya
mirip bukan berarti sama persis
@oompedho : di chapter 5 inilah akan terlihat dimana KARYAKU DAN MOERO DOWNHILL ITU BERBEDA)
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Old 14 August 2010, 18:07   #11
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chapter updated:
chapter 3, 4, 5

@mfa : boong kalo aku bilang ga kepengaruh ama moero downhill 2, tapi lihatlah chapter" selanjutnya
@oompedho : di chapter 5 inilah akan terlihat dimana KARYAKU DAN MOERO DOWNHILL ITU BERBEDA)
Lah kok saya yg di

Yowes Maaf klo ada kata menyinggung

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masih lanjut kan? saya nunggu kelanjutannya...

apalagi pas terakhir ada sebuah nama....Kamio-san? adik saya?

Kamio Misuzu?
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Old 14 August 2010, 18:49   #13
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Lah kok saya yg di

Yowes Maaf klo ada kata menyinggung
hayah
ga ada yang nyinggung kok, justru bagus oom mau ngasi pendapat dan masukan buat saya
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masih lanjut kan? saya nunggu kelanjutannya...

apalagi pas terakhir ada sebuah nama....Kamio-san? adik saya?

Kamio Misuzu?
yoi gan, masi lanjut dan masih panjang ceritanya
nantikan saja

dan kamio itu nama saya, bukan adek anda
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waaahhh,,,, dipost juga akhirnya

yah, ditunggu kelanjutannya
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sori gua boleh nanya bedanya dimana?
gua udah baca chapter5 tapi malah mirip moero 1 sama campuran beberapa anime.
mungkin gua salah kayaknya deh.
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